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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : The Last Moment


jerusalem
08-05-2005, 06:54 PM
The Last Moment
Something is pentrating my chest.Oh,what happened,?I smell the scent of strange flowers,how pleasant this smell is!Iam happy,yes,very happy,and its the first that i feel the real happiness
I feel like anightmare singing and hovering over my countrys olive trees .Every thing around me is green But,what is this red colour?Oh ,its coming out of my body like astream!Iam bleeding,this seems obvious,but there is no pain,I cant feel it...what has happened
where am I?The scene in front of me is not clear...Oh ,Iam carried on shoulders and surrounded with huge numbers of angry people,flags and palms.And among these crowds there are many faces that seem familiar to me...Yes,yes that person is my friend...and that one carrying stones is my cousin ,while the rest are clapping and singing the song which I like very much
How strange this matter is,is it afuneral or awedding...?

Best Regards

هيا القحطاني
08-05-2005, 09:45 PM
Salam sis Jerusalem ...
Nice but I have few comments if u don't mind ...
Your story has stated contradictory feelings as well as ambiguous beginning when u mentioned the bleeding stage ...

I guess you had better not mentioned that bleeding scene cuz it only evoked sad ending which is death ..

Yet , I liked the way u pictured things and the anatomy of scenes

Regards

haya

jerusalem
08-05-2005, 10:01 PM
welcome sister Haya

In my opinion that when we have afuneral for amartyr things mixed , we sing for him national songs and also we are proud that we have heros ,at the same time we suffer how was he killed ,...................

so our emotions are mixed with sadness and with happiness at the same time
thats all


thank u for ur opinion sister


Best Regards

الـفـهـد الـعـربـي
08-05-2005, 11:24 PM
we are proud that we have heros


we hope that for us too ..

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Thank you sister for this scene which hurting our hearts ..



Who is seeing these scenes by his hearts not by his ear ?



with best wishes ..
:)

jerusalem
09-05-2005, 02:56 PM
السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته

Thank you sister for this scene which hurting our hearts .."


thanx alot my brother Fahd for ur kind participation


Best Regards